Well, first try at fanfiction , its about commanders. tell me if you want more, or give me tips. (sorry for grammar) have fun! Episode 1 - Orgins System_Booting <Start_PRGNTR.1024> <BLK_BOX_START_AI_> It was another day for PRGNTR number 1,029,349,045, and the commander started the day like he always does, nanolathing an energy plant. he was looking in the so beautiful planet, cursing the civilization which brought him to life. You see, he said to himself, it was a very smart that the chief of the <DLTD> race brought the idea of making the home serving artificial intelligence robots, into battle machines, at the beginning, there was the first "commander" a pricey dumb pile of metal, with weapons strapped to it. after only a million years, the first PRGNTR was created, the most refined, smart, intelligent, and utterly useless commander ever, you see, the <DLTD> race wasn't really near any aliens, they were a lone wolf, drifting around space on a 1 planet solar system. so they dumped them. the made all the PRGNTR into a pile of trash and hid them away, like Frankenstein, disgusted by the "creature". But they forgot one thing. the commanders weren't a tank, or a gun, they were intelligent, and they came back, seeking revenge. the problem is, they cant do much from the places they were hidden, most of them were de-activated, and until today, nobody (well all the PRGNTR share the same AI but you understand ) knows who activated them, when they activated, they were left with one order. "wait, wait for us to die alone, after that, kill what you want, do what you want". it was a rainy day, when the last <DLTD> died. he wasn't killed by the commanders, he was killed by a war, the last one. for that planet. and out of the ashes the PRGNTR raised, and re-built. and one day, they found what they looked for. life. intelligent life. it was a rainy day, when the last human died. Suddenly, a blip on the radar - INCOMING! since the PRGNTR are the first, they are sometimes found day dreaming, it has patched by other brands of commanders, but since commanders (or at least the PRGNTR) cant patch them self, they stuck like that. The commander manged to forget what he was doing - he is on a battlefield dammit! and the enemy commander didn't forgot that, and when the asteroid hit, it hit hard. he calmed himself down, and returned his attention to the rest of his units, calming the child like AI of them, his makers made the units he produced child like - they obey, but they are dumber and tend to be useless when he isn't holding there hand. he messaged the Alpha factory - a planet size factory which produces commanders, to increase production due to hes closing death, and inform him on the unit count, so he can pick were to focus his giant intelligence next (the PRGNTR have a cloud like mind, which all the same models share with there clones) <1,029,349,569 PRGNTRs> the shock-wave is coming closer <1,029,349,940 PRGNTRs> the planet is starting to shake <1,029,357,023 PRGNTRs> a huge tsunami of fire and lave is hitting the commander hard <1,050,234,214 PRGNTRs> PRGNTR 1,029,349,045 is goind do0010100010001000 <CORE_CRITCL> <URNIUM238_CREATING> <SELF_SUBSTINING_NEUTRUNS> <BLK_BOX_END_TRANSSMISSUN> ERROR 404 PRGNTR not responding Episode 2 - Long forgotten cause the PRGNTR cloud AI wondered what was the reason he became such nostalgic suddenly on the battlefield, perhaps a new virus? impossible he thought to himself, he wold know something happened, but just to be sure he opened hes advanced anti virus program, the program made a few metallic sounds, and as fast as a lighting, a small message poped in the anti virus interference; "the anti virus has crashed, please contract your designer" "primitive organic morons!" he shouted in his mind, guess i will have to make the dirty work myself, he searched in his massive "brain" for something exceptional, and soon enough, he find what he looked for - traces of deleted flies on his hard drive. well they weren't deleted, they were just encrypted, it took him a full micro second to decrypt the message, and as soon as he finished the process, he was sucked into the swirling data log, loosing the control, and for the first time in his billion years of existence, scared. Darkness. "hello? hello?" a weak voice is resonant in the back of H.O.P.E's "head". "i command you to respond!" the weak voice is now loud and clear. H.O.P.E vision is starting to clear. a small, huminude male, is standing in front of him, the man is wearing a gas mask, his face is covered, all around him, there are supporting beams, flashing lights, and fire. fire, everything around him is on fire, beautiful orange, and yellow flames, he start to be dazed, amazed by the beauty of the fire he wants to hold it in his hand, to make it stay... "MK. I, I COMMAND YOU TO RESPOND!" the dream is over, the little, disgusting creature, the Pathetic creation of evolution, "I WILL CRASH YOU LIKE A BUG" H.O.P.E says, the man look startled, but he replays, "i can give you this, you will be able to look at fire as much as you want, just listen to me, and every thing will be all right." "do you promise?" "yes" to be continued You may notice that some peoples are giving me comments about non existing plot holes and grammar issues, it is because i keep expanding the story based on the said comments
Re: Fan-fiction - The story of the first commander Nice :3 Even though i dont quiet catch who threw the asteroid, poor fella
I keep thinking the Progenitor looks like the Theta, so whenever I hear Progenitor I think of a big lumbering orange barrel with legs and arms. Theta is so cute <3
the only thing that look the same to me is the little light on there chest, and the fact that they both don't look like a spider. spider commander any body? :idea:
